“Such fragile wings”
– Jim Harrison (Day Twenty-Three – 28 Days of Unreason)
It is this air
That is fragile –
Carries your hints
But cannot hold them,
Gives way to gesture,
Breaks into wisps,
Suggestions
Easily swept aside.
But when you caught
Your breath,
Amassed its density,
Felt portent spreading
Like wings,
You took flight –
Your anger aloft
On nothing but words
Ah, going back to Harrison; always a great idea. Firstly, I will refrain from sayiing that this poem is dynamic and fluid from beginning to end (dang; said it any way!). Ok, seriously, I’ve read this about 8 times and keep seeing more – seeing scenarios and people that are familiar. ‘Felt portent spreading’ draws me back with the way it leads into the next line. Every word is perfectly selected and placed and it ends with a smack!
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I have three more left to finish. They’ve been percolating. “Fluid”! Wahaha!
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*extra ‘i’ is free – no charge. 🙂
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Aye aye. Eye eye? ii
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Masterfully done, Mr. q! Bernoulli’s bottle contains heady stuff; the makings of a great poem. Next stop, Archimedes’ bathtub! Seriously, a nice read!
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Archimedes’ bathtub!!
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Bouyancy; as essential as flexibility. Especially if you’re in a body of water.
Eventually a sonnet that begins, “In the northern hemisphere, with your back to the wind….” I’m not certain it’s iambic, but there you go.
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OK, collaborative sonnet, we alternate lines. Yours is the kickoff?
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Something tells me I misspelled buoyancy. Mostly the red line that showed under the word just before I sent it.
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Let me ponder that one. Still have strained muscles from the last effort.
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So clever – that moment -… ‘when you caught/ Your breath/amassed its density’ – and flew. Bravo.
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Thank you!!
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Always nice to revisit the Harrison quotes. This is excellent!
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The last stanza/couplet has me thinking. seriously. The whole thing’s so good!
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Thanks so much!
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