Snappish winds
start a locker room towel fight,
welting my skin with pops of ice.
I don't see it coming, a left hook of cold
blasts the side of my face
and I'm seeing stars, no
It is snow,
the fisticuff air
full of mirror shards
blown out of thin, tin air.
Color me gargantuan,
color me snow blind,
the gloves are coming off
you winter SOB!
Wait no, the gloves go back on! Dammit!
[redacted:
a flurry, a blizzard
of blows]
[redacted:
"The first rule
of Fight Club…"]
[redacted: I am a mime
waving away rainbow gnats,
pestilent sparkles]
Back at the house,
the pipes are frozen, and when they thaw
they will burst.
January, by TKO.
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Winter is full of punches. Experiencing a polar vortex here. Best to keep the gloves on for a bit. Sounds like a fight that might be hard to win.
stay warm….
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My money is on Apollo in the 5th.
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Ha lay your money down on the sun to brighten the day, that’s a win!!!
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Uh oh, let your guard down, forgot to bob and weave. Love the boxing/winter analogy … most treacherous true dat!
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Plumber just left. We have water again. Lordy.
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Holy moley, I love this to bits. Every little word. Crazy good.
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Thank you so, so much!
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Oh yes this is spectacular Qbit!! Winter and it’s power certainly can cut to the quick! I love the gloves stanza!!! Brilliant and fun all rolled into one snow ball!!
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Lol! Thanks!!
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Delightful–something to remember when summer has us on our heels later! Hope winter doesn’t leave too deep a mark.
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Thanks, I hope so too!
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The metaphors of this are some of the best I’ve seen – unique and brutal, with humor strewn throughout. You keep your reader off his footing. The redacted inserts are smart. Especially like the locker room towel fight – so like winter to be that gleefully mean. This is great!
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My sparring partners pushed me to stop with the pansy simile jabs, plant my back foot, and go straight right with metaphor. Glad that worked! Thanks!!
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That is ‘like’… nvm 😊
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You’re speaking to a soul sister. January is being unkind in my part of the world as well. Recommend hot toddy and a good book!
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+100 hot toddy and a good book!
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Yer good, kid but ya move like an ape! What ya need is a manager!
I love this. A season as an opponent, it’s visceral, and that ending is the best ending to a poem since the early Jurassic. Bravo.
Yer LEFT, kid, yer LEFT!
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i didn’t see it coming! the punch in the end. knockout
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Ah ya hit the GIRL, kid, ya never hit the GIRL. Ya got heart, kid, but ya fight like a baboon!
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Wahaha!!
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OK! Hey, hope that didn’t mess up your nose! I guess a “black-eye” isn’t the right phrase here, “white-eye?”
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Awesome, Randall! Got here late, so all the good bits have been picked up and commented on. I can’t even find a foot- or toehold to go snarky on. Sting like sleet, float on the slush.
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Sting like sleet!!!
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Haha, I love this! Especially:
“the gloves are coming off
you winter SOB!
Wait no, the gloves go back on!”
😂
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Hahaha! Yep!
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Put up a good fight here, but leave the gloves off,
there is no winning with the snow.
Remedy? Wait it out, it will not last.
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Got lucky with the plumber. Came about 7:30 PM, after he’d been out fixing burst pipes since. 4AM. Grateful for that.
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Like this abit — a little frustration, a little humor!
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Thanks, lol!
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“the fisticuff air full of mirror shards” love that phrase. Winter can certainly throw punches. The coldest walk I ever took in my life was in a wind chill of 65 below. I had no choice. The cupboards were empty and I had two young girls to feed. I didn’t even want to take a breath.
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Good lord! Where was that!
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Grand metaphors in this, q. Also liked the redacted lines at the end. Very clever!
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Thanks!!!
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