Me/Her/Wind

~ qbit
I’m a tornado of bees,
a cyclone of buzz and hum
You have more sharp turns
than a toboggan of hornets
I’ll rattle your mullions, believe you me,
love storm of the century.
The sky is seasick
with hurricanes
We’re the full catastrophe,
no atrophy
No apostrophe,
no trophy
You ring in my ears like dynamite,
like a fight between samba and flamenco
Oh Nagasaki, oh hot ginger,
oh Ali‘s rhumba in the jungle
More fun than a barrel of mimes
tipping over Niagara
You are handcuffed to wind,
laughing about mortality
Eskimo my nose, my toes,
cuddle is the new tundra
The windows leak ghosts,
whistling for their supper
But this is a love poem,
gorgeous with leaves turning cartwheels
Rain weeps through the cracks in my hands,
wanders the damp maze of my bones

For Shay’s Word Garden and TSM

27 thoughts on “Me/Her/Wind”

  4. Those final three quatrains were the ones that I went back to read again. They are excellent. I had to look up “mullions.” I never knew what those were called before. When I read one of Jim Brosnan’s books, he talked about another ballplayer’s nickname being “Mullion” which he said meant “ugly.” I think it was in regard to reliever Marshall Bridges. I have also heard old Pirate and expansion Senator pitcher Bennie Daniels called “Mullion.”

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    1. Interesting! Glad those had something that caught your attention. They were distillate from the other word list. Except the whole poem was like that, just awful when it was an endless dirge. It worked better once there was some counter voice.

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  11. What great word play! And what amazing images! These are my favourite stanzas:

    Eskimo my nose, my toes,
    cuddle is the new tundra
    The windows leak ghosts,
    whistling for their supper
    But this is a love poem,
    gorgeous with leaves turning cartwheels
    Rain weeps through the cracks in my hands,
    wanders the damp maze of my bones

    Just such imaginative, wonderful writing.

    How did you get the grid onto WP? I have tried to lay out poems like this but have failed under WP’s limitations.

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    1. Hey, thanks! So to format that, I use a table block. On the right, you can choose between a “grid” or the banding. lmk if that makes sense, if not I can probably step you through it.

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  13. hey qbit, i’ve been waiting for a new poem from you, glad you take your time, cause quality is key and all, but damn, this great!

    it’s a love poem, or rather a love dialog. i love this format, it’s so versatile. in some of your applications is like getting the narrative plus the stage direction, like seeing the poem “in the round”. and other times it’s a dialog, a conversation in riddles. i really really like this format of yours.

    “More fun than a barrel of mimes
    tipping over Niagara”

    heh, i can see that, great image, and then the response:

    “You are handcuffed to wind,
    laughing about mortality”

    you’re a pretty good mime yourself =)

    a steamy conversation, and a great poem sir, well done

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