A slight,
Wakeful thought
Betrays sleep.
Jilts
My cup of dreams,
And spills them
Into morning.
Breaks faith
That I might hold you
For just one more
Moment.
The Quantumverse
A slight,
Wakeful thought
Betrays sleep.
Jilts
My cup of dreams,
And spills them
Into morning.
Breaks faith
That I might hold you
For just one more
Moment.
Been there!
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Alas… even the best of nights end with an awakening …
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Yep. LOL!
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Sorry the dreams got spilled. Perhaps they’ll be replaced with waking dreams.
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Yes, but the sleeping ones were sooo goood! LOL!
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I like the spilling dreams and the image that goes with it.
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Thanks. That was the most fun part to write and post.
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The short, clipped lines emphasize the overall feel of this outstanding poem. The form feels like a jilting cup of coffee being spilled and being awake in the wee small hours. That last line, of course, is a show-stopper. This is such a well crafted bit of art, my friend!
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Thanks so much!! Really glad you liked it.
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A slight–Jilt–Breaks faith, the choice of the first lines says a lot in this poem. Deeply relatable!
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Thank you! Was hoping that would work.
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I truly enjoy the way this is framed by the first word in each stanza!
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Thanks! Of course, I started out with some other entire plan. But after a bit, I sort of thought I should probably just stop while I was ahead, LOL!
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Always a viable option! The other is to keep going until you hit a dead end or realize you have more than one poem! 🙂
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The boat has to go through some furious stormy weather. What a disturbing dream can this be?
Hank
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Thanks, interesting way to tie the ship back to the poem. Nice, hadn’t thought of that.
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That fleeting moment….love this capture ~ Wishing you a happy summer ~
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Thanks! You too!
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So well crafted in few words. You share an experience that most likely all of us can related to in one way or another.
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Thanks!
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